First documentary draft

With our first edit of our documentary, we can see a real narrative to our documentary. We can see a todorav structure and how the final documentary will end up looking. After receiving feedback from our class mates and teachers, we came up with things to change on our documentary:
-Voice-over changes
-sharper cuts
-ending
-fade outs
-change of doc mode (observatory to participatory)
-change to script (third and first)
You can clearly see the voice over and ending is poor. I did the voice over on Sony Vegas 11 on my own laptops that i had no clue was party damaged until I actually got recording, hence the poor recording.


From our feedback, we established that too many fadeout made our documentary slightly boring, however, when I was editing I found that having too many sharp cuts made the documentary seem rushed. This was a bit of a  dilemma for smooth continuity. This is something to consider when we make changes.
Our teacher also expressed his criticism to the sound levels when we interview rand people on the street about dopamine. he thinks we can play with the sound a bit more, lowering the ambience. When I was editing, I already noticed it but found it hard to change it but I'll consider this when I get back to editing. Additionally, after careful consideration, we decided to change the mode of the documentary from observatory to participatory, essentially altering the script from third person to first.